Comments on: Stars http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/ A journal of the creative writing process. Wed, 08 Feb 2012 06:36:26 +0000 hourly 1 By: christopher. http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/#comment-438 christopher. Thu, 30 Oct 2008 17:49:22 +0000 http://cirellio.wordpress.com/?p=717#comment-438 I have nothing to say but this: Dude, I'm digging this majorly. I have nothing to say but this:

Dude, I’m digging this majorly.

]]> By: cirellio http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/#comment-437 cirellio Wed, 29 Oct 2008 22:12:32 +0000 http://cirellio.wordpress.com/?p=717#comment-437 yeah - that was my fault. I should've made it more clear. I guess in my trying to be succinct, it came off as urgent. Anyway, she's definitely pretty intrigued by Cirellio ... imagine walking around and being able to tell how important people are or are going to be to the world---Cauinn can do just that. So she asks herself 'how could a mere thief make such a big difference in this world? And will it be a good difference or a bad difference?' Would you feel an obligation to watch these people, just to make sure they weren't going to cause harm? Especially after you've seen it happen before? yeah – that was my fault. I should’ve made it more clear. I guess in my trying to be succinct, it came off as urgent.

Anyway, she’s definitely pretty intrigued by Cirellio … imagine walking around and being able to tell how important people are or are going to be to the world—Cauinn can do just that. So she asks herself ‘how could a mere thief make such a big difference in this world? And will it be a good difference or a bad difference?’ Would you feel an obligation to watch these people, just to make sure they weren’t going to cause harm? Especially after you’ve seen it happen
before?

]]> By: packsister http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/#comment-436 packsister Wed, 29 Oct 2008 18:53:39 +0000 http://cirellio.wordpress.com/?p=717#comment-436 Ah, okay. You see, all I had to go on from was you saying: "No matter how many turns he takes, she keeps pursuing." and that sounded quite like urgent following to me. So she was just fascinated? Must have been REALLY fascinated. I do realise the reader wasn't yet supposed to know what she wanted with his hair, and I really am eager to find out, so you just keep us updated here! Ah, okay. You see, all I had to go on from was you saying: “No matter how many turns he takes, she keeps pursuing.” and that sounded quite like urgent following to me. So she was just fascinated? Must have been REALLY fascinated. I do realise the reader wasn’t yet supposed to know what she wanted with his hair, and I really am eager to find out, so you just keep us updated here!

]]> By: cirellio http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/#comment-435 cirellio Wed, 29 Oct 2008 17:31:34 +0000 http://cirellio.wordpress.com/?p=717#comment-435 @Latrina: Thanks! These summaries are meant to help me see the big picture. They kind of let me know the bare-minimum I could get away with and still have all the events of the story unfold; tells me what is and is not necessary. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. @packsister: The girl who was following him wasn't urgently following him per se. Just following at a walking pace. (And if Cirellio would have taken off running, it would have gathered a lot of attention.) She followed him only because she was fascinated by him, but that's not something Cirellio is ready to understand at this point, and it's from his POV. He also has NO IDEA why she would cut off a tuft of his hair. Neither does the reader ;) It's quite unexpected, isn't it? Why that happened will be revealed later, like halfway through the book. @Latrina: Thanks! These summaries are meant to help me see the big picture. They kind of let me know the bare-minimum I could get away with and still have all the events of the story unfold; tells me what is and is not necessary.
I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

@packsister: The girl who was following him wasn’t urgently following him per se. Just following at a walking pace. (And if Cirellio would have taken off running, it would have gathered a lot of attention.)
She followed him only because she was fascinated by him, but that’s not something Cirellio is ready to understand at this point, and it’s from his POV.
He also has NO IDEA why she would cut off a tuft of his hair. Neither does the reader ;) It’s quite unexpected, isn’t it? Why that happened will be revealed later, like halfway through the book.

]]> By: packsister http://5-rings.com/blog/2008/10/stars/#comment-434 packsister Wed, 29 Oct 2008 15:53:48 +0000 http://cirellio.wordpress.com/?p=717#comment-434 I wondered one thing, which I couldn't get from what you wrote here. namely: what exactly did she want from him that was so urgent that she had to follow him around with such persistence? You know that I'm not criticising, only trying to understand. Did she just want his hair? I wondered one thing, which I couldn’t get from what you wrote here. namely: what exactly did she want from him that was so urgent that she had to follow him around with such persistence? You know that I’m not criticising, only trying to understand. Did she just want his hair?

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